Need Feedback On My Third Race

[T.Allen.Smith]

Um, I can't see her... Is it just me?

No. Same here....

[Sheilawisz]

I can see both Omlaka pictures just fine, there should be no problem Ankari- Can the rest of you see the pictures now??

[Rikilamaro]

Nice. Only comment I would add pertains to things we discussed yesterday. She's from a cold, dark land. Her knees would be freezing, chapped, and reddened. (assuming her blood is red) I'd add tights or leggings under her skirt. Otherwise, she looks awesome.

[SeleneHime]

@Selenhimes: That is a good question. At "present" (I am currently writing in the past of my universe) their is somewhat of a female revolution (not feminism). They are breaking away from the male structure of power by committing to a religious ceremony that takes them away from home (think of the holy grail quest that takes 5 to 10 years). It is male dominated, but females are making their inroads.

Also, I never stated they had elfish ears. Did you get the impression from somewhere? I would need to address it.

An equality movement, then. Since most cultures also have religion of some sort, how big of a part does it play in their lives? (You did mention a bit of a holy grail quest, so it brought up the thought.)

As for the ears, that was my fault. I misread the paragraph about them growing their hair to cover their ears. Sorry. ^_^"

[amar654]

cool race, u should stick with it

[Caliburn]

The darlak lines are a draw for me. Adds a twist to the hardy northerner style, and I like how the lines serve a practical purpose as well. I suggest avoiding futuristic or digital-looking lines unless it is important to the flavour; the patterns on the chest look tribal/folkish, while the shapes on the arm look almost mecha influenced.

I'm undecided about the facial lines. My guess is the glowing eyes are enough.

I think the female's clothing could look more interesting. I would also like to see the "better muscle definition".

Good luck Ankari I'm impressed by the effort you have put into your website/project so far.

[RedMorningSky]

I really like the pictures and descriptions. Makes me want to read the story so that's always a good sign.