Velka
Sage
My world is a fantasy setting, but very much based on the Phoenicians; think Lebanon, seafaring people, domination of the Mediterranean Sea.
One of my MCs is a woman who is from a completely made up city-state in a completely made up country, but I want to communicate to my reader that she is not Caucasian. I've done my research, but I've found most of it outlines what not to do when addressing race, instead of what to effectively do.
There have also been arguments that describing skin colour is akin to describing hair or eye colour; only do it when it is necessary to the plot. While I agree that tedious character description achieves nothing, I do strongly feel that it is important that my reader doesn't default to her being Caucasian. She doesn't face discrimination or adversity due to her race in the story (since it is based in her lands), but it is a part of who she is and I think it's important (I know I've said that twice, but it's important to me... damnit, three times). I also want to have her mixed race (that of Athar; brown skin/dark eyes/black hair, and Sidon; lighter skin and characteristic golden eyes) act as a physical metaphor of her ties to the two city-states.
Here's what I've come up with. Please criticize & comment.
"She certainly had the Artharian complexion, deep and bronzed by birth and sun, but her eyes were golden, like those from Sidon."
Does this conjure an image of a woman of Arabic descent? If not, what do you suggest?
One of my MCs is a woman who is from a completely made up city-state in a completely made up country, but I want to communicate to my reader that she is not Caucasian. I've done my research, but I've found most of it outlines what not to do when addressing race, instead of what to effectively do.
There have also been arguments that describing skin colour is akin to describing hair or eye colour; only do it when it is necessary to the plot. While I agree that tedious character description achieves nothing, I do strongly feel that it is important that my reader doesn't default to her being Caucasian. She doesn't face discrimination or adversity due to her race in the story (since it is based in her lands), but it is a part of who she is and I think it's important (I know I've said that twice, but it's important to me... damnit, three times). I also want to have her mixed race (that of Athar; brown skin/dark eyes/black hair, and Sidon; lighter skin and characteristic golden eyes) act as a physical metaphor of her ties to the two city-states.
Here's what I've come up with. Please criticize & comment.
"She certainly had the Artharian complexion, deep and bronzed by birth and sun, but her eyes were golden, like those from Sidon."
Does this conjure an image of a woman of Arabic descent? If not, what do you suggest?