I've fortunate to have a great writer's group that have helped me tremendously in shaping my world. They over tons of insight that I value. One of the comments I've received indicates that I should not hide information that the POV knows from the reader. I would love a consensus from a broader audience. First, let me provide a few parameters/notes:
- Both people in the scene have prior knowledge of the unknown subject. It was not mentioned in the book because it is a long running plan/dream that is just now seeing light.
- I agree with the comment in many instances. I agree that it's annoying when one person cuts of the other for no reason to hid the juicy detail from the reader. But this is different. It is something that has been said, just not within the pages of the book.
- It's meant to be somewhat of a surprise. I think people will say "What the hell?" when they finish reading the book.
- I am taking the method of Steven Erickson (I know, I use his name too much). He does this, and I think, tastefully By the time the plot unfolds I always praise the anticipation he builds up.