Iíd like to get your help on a more specific question about my story. Somehow, Iíve hit a wall with this and I hope someone can give me a useful impulse.
As mentioned in my last thread it suffers from a few severe problems and Iím working to sort them out at the moment.
Given that magical training will be an important part of the story, Iím wondering whatís the best way to do this. In my first draft, I have a system combining mentor-student-relationship with group training sessions at the weekends and a few weeks together. Iíve chosen this approach because the differences in age of knowledge between the novices make a school system rather difficult. (Besides the fact that magic schools arenít the most original concept out there. )
Given the fact that I have elemental magic based on chemical elements a training system where they donít learn to interact with others doesnít make much sense either though, therefore the combined version.
Rethinking the problems that my first draft had, an amount of redundancy was the result of this however. Besides that, there werenít many things happening during the group training besides a bullying plotline which Iíve already decided to cut. I also had some scenes in ordinary school and her adeptís city which I donít really know if should keep either. Too many characters and places that donít really matter to the plot enough. In the last thread I did get the idea to introduce a more severe thread there however.
The novice Lenima and her adept Corin are both main characters, that was my reason to choose him as her mentor, I wanted to avoid unnecessary characters again. Thereís a problem as well however. They have different elements, chlorine and oxygen and he doesnít really understand the troubles sheís facing and therefore canít help her much. This way, the plot doesnít move on either of course. One reason why Iíve kept the common training sessions so far. The teacher in charge of her there is quite nasty and doesnít really encourage her either though. (People from the Mythic Cantina thread will know. )
Lenima is supposed to move from not wanting anything to do with it all and wanting to home to acceptance and curiosity. At the moment, sheís feeling sorry for herself for way too long and I know that this will annoy potential readers rather than grab their interest. She's seventeen by the way.
Now Iím asking myself what I have to change about the training to improve this. Does someone see the flaw in the stuff Iíve described above? I seem to be blind to it for some reason. Do you think a pure magic school setting with more interaction between various novices would help?