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Portfolio Entries from Feith

  1. Chapter 3 (Part 1)

    As River stepped through the door – which had mysteriously swung open, even though she could see no doorman – she felt beyond overwhelmed. The hall was large and spacious, with tapestries woven with bright, bold colors hanging on the walls. Mosaics made of polished jewels were spaced intermittently between the tapestries. The people who lined the walls were as stunning as the room. They were tall and elegant, fair of face and beautiful in a dangerous and terrifying way. The women wore long,...
  2. Chapter 2 (Part 3)

    Amara glanced up at the sun. “Hurry. We are late. It is not good form to be late when meeting your king.” She sped up to a slow, graceful lope that River recognized immediately. “Hey, how can you do that?” she asked, matching the pace shakily at first, then smoother, so that she and Amára’s strides were mirror images of each other. “No one else in my family can, not even my brother. It drives my PE teacher crazy.” Amára cast a surprised glance at her. “The galín is the signature gait of...
  3. Chapter 2 (Part 2)

    Suddenly, a thought pounded through River’s mind – her phone. Her phone might be working again. She had to call her mom and tell her to call the police. She had to tell her that some monsters has escaped from a zoo and that Caleb was missing and that a crazy person, no matter how beautiful, was living in the woods with delusions about being and elf and there being a king. Quickly, River reached down and unbuttoned one of her two secure pockets on her cargo pants, then pulled her phone out...
  4. Chapter 2 (Part 1)

    River awoke to the sounds of singing birds and rustling leaves. She blinked, staring stupidly at the wood ceiling above her, her mind a complete blank. All she was aware of was the sounds of a forest and the paneled ceiling she stared at. A moment later she realized she was very thirsty. Some cold water would be nice. She had barely finished the thought when everything came flooding back – the tiny creek, the light from her pendent the strange images she had “seen” just before reaching the...
  5. Chapter 1 (Part 2)

    “Then stay there! I think that’s yarrow. I’ll only take a second.” Caleb wavered for a moment, then chased after his sister. When he caught up with her she was kneeling next to the flowers, grinning. “This is great!” River said. “It’s yarrow, all right. The leaves are unmistakable. This is almost better than the elder! Yarrow is really good for cold hands or feet. Mom’ll love this.” With that, she withdrew a pair of scissors from her backpack and carefully began...
  6. Chapter 1 (Part 1)

    Chapter I Fifteen year old River walked next to her brother Caleb on the sidewalk, her bright blue earbuds a sharp contrast with her dark outfit. Her black mock turtleneck, black cargo pants, and short black boots weren’t her usual style, and the gothic colors had surprised her friends. She herself hadn’t wanted to wear such a gloomy outfit, but after forgetting to do the laundry she was stuck with it. The only color she had was her silver necklace, with a sapphire forming a crescent moon,...
  7. Prologue

    Right, here's a modified version of the prologue! Also, quick note - the last sentence feels a little choppy to me. Suggestions as to how to make it better?
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