“Who did this boy? The woman demanded in Senegalese as she poured water over the young boy’s broken, bleeding skin.
The child hesitated, “John.” The boy replied, wincing as the older woman began to spread a salve over his back. She gritted her teeth as she worked, she could...
Again I have revised this scene, I was not at all happy with the previous version so I did not even bother to post it. Trust me it was THAT bad!
Anyhow, ignoring the obvious things such as Grammar and punctuation, which I cleaned up as much as I am capable of, thoughts?
Ok, so here is the deal. I'm posting the various revisions of my prologue because A- I like to see where I started compared to where I ended, but B- I hope that it helps someone else.
I don't bother editing these for picky things like punctuation, it's not good enough yet to warrant that kind...
“Oh my God Dean! This place is so pretty!” Emily exclaimed as she spread the blanket out over the grass.
“I thought you’d like it.” He flashed her a seductive grin as he stripped off his white tee shirt, flexing as many muscles as he could in the process before he...
Seriously rough first two "chapters" for the ghost story novel.
They are more like a prologue than chapters...
Grammar, punctuation and what not aside thoughts?
“Dean, this place is so pretty!” Emily exclaimed as she spread the blanket out over the grass.
“I thought you’d like it.”...
I hope that fellow Scribes will help out with this.
I'm collecting clothing for the people of West, TX.
I have family in the area and hearing how things are it makes me want to cry!
I'm asking if those of you in the states can do simple things that will go a long way to help these people.
"I didn't have a catharsis for my childhood pain, most of us don't, and until I learned how to forgive those people and let it go, I was unhappy." Tyler Perry.
Seriously all joking aside, it's been a really bad day!
One of those you just lay down and scream until you cry type days.
I'm there, I'm like the wind.
Through thick and thin I am your forever friend.
Never think twice about asking for advice.
My ear is open to any trouble you have.
Life is cruel this we know...
I wish I could give you something more, that I could be in your place and you in mine.
Sometimes you have to cut through all the nonsense in life to find the important things. For that reason I love Dr. Seuss. His abilities reached far beyond beloved childrens books. Here are a few of my top Dr. Seuss quotes.
"Don't cry because it's over, smile because it happened.”
Bebasi Dard Ka Aalam - Baabul
bebasi dard kaa aalam, tum mujhe de do apne ghum
give me all your troubles, your helplessness, your pain
... khaamoshiyaan bhi do, tanhaaiyaan bhi do
give me your silences, your loneliness too
bechaaniyaa bhi de do, de do naa
why don’t you...