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  1. The past breathed and preyed upon the dying. The faces of bygone, war stained and splattered long before such blood had even been shed. They were there; I could see them. I could hear them. Unholy eyes of the living dead bored alongside me on either side. On every side, every which way I turned, there they were with their silent screams of charge. And I ran, head long into the thick of that which would change my appearance to reflect that which was...

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    Eztlirald Clarinda
    An aspiring writer, the Cyrom series has been the progress of three years of exploring, experimenting, and world building that I have lived and breathed. It is an adventure and addiction of one I hope to never break from. Thank you to all the characters whom I love.


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  1. Lynea
    Ooh, it's very ominous, I like it.

    I would say, try not to use too many repetitions of the same word within a couple of sentences. I see three uses of 'past', two uses of 'blood', and a few variations of side, like 'alongside', 'either side', 'every side'. Honestly, I don't mind the sides because I feel your word flow and repetition is very artistic right there, but, be careful how many times you use a word within the same paragraph or passage. Too much repetition can weaken a passage and I can see you're a strong writer who got no time for that, lol. (I struggle with this tbh, so I'm preaching to the choir, but you know what I mean?)
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    1. Eztlirald Clarinda
      Thank you for that! After going back into the paragraph, I do see the stumbling block with the repetition of “blood”. And yes, I TOTALLY understand the preaching part. :LOL:
    2. Lynea
      Lol. I like prologues that are short and sweet. Nicely done (y)
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