Laurence
Inkling
For an agent/editor/publisher pitch scenario, eg. standing at a convention delivering one succinct sentence during conversation, which of the following routes sell you in best? Each example here is trying to do something different so I imagine none of them are bang on, but it'll be helpful to hear which you think is closest.
Option 1
It’s a relatively fast paced adult epic fantasy following a family seeking asylum in their mother’s homeland.
Option 2
In this adult epic fantasy, a family seeking refuge and mending travel to the source of an ancient life force, only to discover they are far from welcome to it.
Option 3
In a world scarred by revenge, an immortal mother and a fox lead her family of refugees to the ancestral home, only to discover it too is corrupted, and they are not welcome.
It'd be cool to see how you guys deliver your own one line pitches too, whether for a rating, feedback, deciding between options or tweaking. These could be real pitches or for non existing projects.
Option 1
It’s a relatively fast paced adult epic fantasy following a family seeking asylum in their mother’s homeland.
Option 2
In this adult epic fantasy, a family seeking refuge and mending travel to the source of an ancient life force, only to discover they are far from welcome to it.
Option 3
In a world scarred by revenge, an immortal mother and a fox lead her family of refugees to the ancestral home, only to discover it too is corrupted, and they are not welcome.
- Which option most entices you? Least, more or most detail?
- Would you go for a more relaxed or more blurb-ready type of pitch?
- do you focus more on the internal or external conflicts?
- Close character focus vs zooming out on issues happening all over your world?
- Should the genre and audience be stated outright or implied?
- How much info should be given away? Do you reveal things that you wouldn't reveal to potential readers?
- Is it alright that this is really a pitch for the entire trilogy and that the family don't reach said homeland until the second book?
It'd be cool to see how you guys deliver your own one line pitches too, whether for a rating, feedback, deciding between options or tweaking. These could be real pitches or for non existing projects.
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