Recent content by L.L. Maurizi

Before I suggest a way to do it, a couple of notes: Your background is a concept very similar to the beliefs of the Roman Catholic Church, as in essentially identical (as others have mentioned). This is not to say that it holds no merit as a story, but if your intent is not to write a story...

I tend to avoid contractions in the narration, but I use them in dialogue. There are exceptions though. If I feel that a sentence or a passage is too verbose, or it reads exceedingly unnaturally or heavy, I will use contractions in the narration too, albeit sporadically.

I do hope this editor is wrong. I write in both PoVs but most recently I've used omniscient + multiple characters PoVs in the same book (it's an ensemble). Though, tbf, I do believe most books take the scene-character perspective to narrate

I would decide your chapter-division more based on story than word-count. End the chapter when there is a reasonable moment to move to another portion of the story (the end of a segment, a cliffhanger, switching to another character or location, etc). You will find that, in most books written...

that's how I was hoping it would come across.

The Chasm Desert and the chasm itself is the product of a battle that occurred 1000 years prior to my story between a race of demigods and immensely powerful sorcerers who used to dominate Velorath. The desert is not natural. It's essentially the product of an induced...

The river doesn't go towards the coast. The coast would be on the opposite side of the mountains you see there at the south. It may be unclear due to poor design.

That is correct. The map is intended to be rich, but not geographically/geologically accurate to real-world standards. It's intended to be rich, but very much fantasy.

It's more like this: spring in the south--> river--> small lake --> river --> Sea of Dharr I can see the issue about size yeah (I will add a scale). I kinda need to have the places relatively bigger because they would otherwise be barely visible on the map. It's relevant to keep in mind that...

You make a good point. I did try to have most cities close to some kind of water body, but I also wanted others to be of a different nature. I haven't thought about moving all the cities closer to water. One issue would be that, while more realistic, It would make the map a little empty in most...

A few other thoughts: Some people don't like labels that run at weird angles. Forest of Feyr, for example. Your mileage on that may vary. I'm curious what others think, but I also wouldn't be satisfied that the watermarks are clear enough. And maps in a book usually have to be greyscale. I...

I'll have to make some modifications to the map soon (after reading through this thread). I'll add a scale, you're right. Not sure about this. Why do you think so? I do know that it holds to be true generally in some countries, but I don't think it's universal. Some hills do sound like a good...

I'm less worried about the name Incubus since it's unoriginally named after the effect it has on people in my book. I went and double checked though, and aside from the band (which is where I thought of the name first) I didn't find anything particularly prominent.

The big thing that leaps out to me.... is Emerald City, which is from the Wizard of Oz. I find the reference very distracting and suggest changing it. A normal river would have a lot of smaller rivers and streams feeding into them. It also seems extremely boxy. The edges of the continent...

Thank you! I didn't think about any particular comment, so any comment (including the "how did that even" ones) would be fun to deal with. It may help me think about something I didn't previously consider, or help me test if my reasoning is solid. To the point of the whirlwind, it is actual. It...