Garren Jacobsen
Auror
Alright ladies, gents, and mythical creatures I have a major question that, if answered in the affirmative, will require a major rewrite. I actually really like the idea I am about to propose but I want to hear your great input.
To get a proper understanding of my idea I am going to propose I am going to give a skeleton structure of each.
---current version---
In this version Jude, my MC, is a good individual. He has a magical disease that makes him underclass and part of a repressed group. There is a terrorist organization that is trying to rectify this situation but through violent means. Jude is accepted to a good university, but has to join an underground fight league to pay for housing, books, tuition etc. (His parents refuse to pay for him.) That league turns out to be a recruiting organization for the terrorists. He gets propositioned a couple of times but refuses to join each time. These advances culminate in Jude uncovering a plot to infect thousands of people with the Disease.
---proposed version---
In this version the only thing that changes is that Jude does start down the path to joining the terrorist organization. This requires a proper set up of course so some important background stuff will need to change.
What do you all think?
To get a proper understanding of my idea I am going to propose I am going to give a skeleton structure of each.
---current version---
In this version Jude, my MC, is a good individual. He has a magical disease that makes him underclass and part of a repressed group. There is a terrorist organization that is trying to rectify this situation but through violent means. Jude is accepted to a good university, but has to join an underground fight league to pay for housing, books, tuition etc. (His parents refuse to pay for him.) That league turns out to be a recruiting organization for the terrorists. He gets propositioned a couple of times but refuses to join each time. These advances culminate in Jude uncovering a plot to infect thousands of people with the Disease.
---proposed version---
In this version the only thing that changes is that Jude does start down the path to joining the terrorist organization. This requires a proper set up of course so some important background stuff will need to change.
What do you all think?