awildorange
New Member
Hey everybody! I'm new here and looking for advice because I'm writing the first chapter of my story which is an erotic novel about a threesome relationship between a girl, her step brother and his best friend. The girl is has a traumatized past, is seeking revenge towards her parents and is living with her father and the step brother. My question is if I should include in the story the fact that the girl( JADE) is having an alter ego and is talking with this imaginary friend in her head, later on she falls for her step brother and the alter ego falls for his best friend (kinda like in HP with Voldemort) . Also am I allowed to post here my first chapter for advice and grammar, spelling correction? Thanks for reading this and I highly appreciate your help!!