WordyWonderland
Scribe
Hello!
I know a great tool of writing is show don’t tell. However, like a real tool, it isn’t always useful. Well. But I’m not the girl, who can’t use it effectively if it’s great for using.
I mean:
My style
Gary was angry. His face turned red, his fist clinched and hit the table. “What do you think? You can’t do that, Dad.”
Good show don’t tell
Gary’s face turned red. His teeth were clenched. He clinched his fist and hit the table. “What do you think?” His voice boomed. “You can’t do that, Dad!”
Any tip for me improving my show don’t tell.
I know a great tool of writing is show don’t tell. However, like a real tool, it isn’t always useful. Well. But I’m not the girl, who can’t use it effectively if it’s great for using.
I mean:
My style
Gary was angry. His face turned red, his fist clinched and hit the table. “What do you think? You can’t do that, Dad.”
Good show don’t tell
Gary’s face turned red. His teeth were clenched. He clinched his fist and hit the table. “What do you think?” His voice boomed. “You can’t do that, Dad!”
Any tip for me improving my show don’t tell.