The Dark One
Auror
We all hate it right? But sometimes there's no way around it...
I was going over final proofs for my next book the other day and there is one section that still mildly irritates me. It is a complex dystopia and, for the most part, I convey its features and rules within the beats of the story, but there is one long dense para in which the MC is thinking about a scary new religion.
For all I know, readers won't even notice, and certainly the editor hasn't identified it as a problem. But it still irks me.
Thing is, the richness of the info conveyed in that one para - which comes about 25pp in - is just about worth it in a world building sense.
One of my favourite books is 1984 but it has pages and pages of info dump when (for example) Winston is reading Goldstein's book. So even the masters do it.
Thoughts?
I was going over final proofs for my next book the other day and there is one section that still mildly irritates me. It is a complex dystopia and, for the most part, I convey its features and rules within the beats of the story, but there is one long dense para in which the MC is thinking about a scary new religion.
For all I know, readers won't even notice, and certainly the editor hasn't identified it as a problem. But it still irks me.
Thing is, the richness of the info conveyed in that one para - which comes about 25pp in - is just about worth it in a world building sense.
One of my favourite books is 1984 but it has pages and pages of info dump when (for example) Winston is reading Goldstein's book. So even the masters do it.
Thoughts?