Leif Notae
Sage
All right, since my participation in the other thread (Do These Things Bother Others...) warranted some in depth details as to what I meant, I wanted to make this a separate thread for those who struggle with dialogue or even getting a realistic story out of their head at times. This is what I am calling the "faux triangle", but all the credit in the world belongs to Tom Chiarella in his "Writing Dialogue" book. Please, do yourself a favor and check it out.
The reader relationship triangle
Now, this doesn't apply to everything you writer or all writers who exist, but it does point out the problems when you think about the reader as a participant instead of a voyeur.
When you write with the reader as a participant (the left side of the diagram), you are including them in on the conversation and showing them tidbits they wouldn't have seen before. They are to "get the joke" before the characters do, or they will alter dialogue to state things that a normal person wouldn't do, just for the sake of doing it. ("Well, as you know Bob...").
The right side of this diagram is where more depth is found in hooking a reader. They are not a PART of the manuscript, but they are looking in on it. A witness to a world they could get lost in. Sneaking a listen in on a key piece of dialogue only passed between friends. Sharing intimate moments with people they know they shouldn't.
When you run through your writing, whether it is dialogue or just the regular scene, take a look at this diagram and see if there is something you can do to EXCLUDE the reader from being a part of the scene and instead INCLUDE them as a voyeur. Give them something tantalizing and, dare I say, naughty to remember.
Again, go get the book. This awkward Excel diagram doesn't do the content justice.
The reader relationship triangle
Now, this doesn't apply to everything you writer or all writers who exist, but it does point out the problems when you think about the reader as a participant instead of a voyeur.
When you write with the reader as a participant (the left side of the diagram), you are including them in on the conversation and showing them tidbits they wouldn't have seen before. They are to "get the joke" before the characters do, or they will alter dialogue to state things that a normal person wouldn't do, just for the sake of doing it. ("Well, as you know Bob...").
The right side of this diagram is where more depth is found in hooking a reader. They are not a PART of the manuscript, but they are looking in on it. A witness to a world they could get lost in. Sneaking a listen in on a key piece of dialogue only passed between friends. Sharing intimate moments with people they know they shouldn't.
When you run through your writing, whether it is dialogue or just the regular scene, take a look at this diagram and see if there is something you can do to EXCLUDE the reader from being a part of the scene and instead INCLUDE them as a voyeur. Give them something tantalizing and, dare I say, naughty to remember.
Again, go get the book. This awkward Excel diagram doesn't do the content justice.