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Auror
I don't know how clear this is without having read the chapter, and I'm unsure how well I've explained it, so bear with me
(Chapter 1 is here, for anyone interested in reading/critiquing, by the way, which would be greatly appreciated.)
I've had some critiques on chapter 1, and in some of those the critiquers (if that's even a word) had problems with a shift in the character, as they hadn't picked up on some things being hints to the character's personality and motivations, and thought of them only as what was happening. They were questioning like "why would he do this?" when the answer wasn't stated, being left instead as hints.
Basically, I haven't spelled everything about the character out, and the first the readers see of him is that he's depressed, drowning his sorrows with drinking (his wife died.) He looks down at himself, a drunken mess, and tries forcing himself out of it all. A "this isn't me" type thing. He hears about bandits kidnapping people, so he goes to hunt them. When he does he's a smartass and arrogant about it all.
Some critiquers didn't understand this shift in character, why he's gone from devastated to happily hunting and killing these people, and being having an arrogant personality now.
The reason for this is that he's a monster hunter/adventurer, who had spent a lot of life travelling and adventuring with his wife. After his initial realization of the "this isn't me" part, he tries to force himself back into his old life, trying to do what he enjoys. He just wants to forget it all and move on. He's arrogant because he's got a bit of an ego from never being defeated in battle (not large scale war type ones, more duels, if anything.) This also all adds to a twist with his character that happens later on.
I had thought that seeing him out and hunting like this, being the way he is at that point, would have made readers think something like "oh, how come he's like this, now?" so that they would read on to figure out what his character is all about. Instead, it seemed more like "that's not right." These critiquers simply thought I hadn't thought the character through well enough, it seemed.
So here's the question:
What would you do in a situation like this? Have his motivations and personality fully revealed over the course of a couple of chapters, or change it to have them spelled out more from the get go, or what?
Would you question the character's personality/motivations or the writing if you read this?
I don't want a reader picking up the book and putting the character's actions down as the writing not being thought through well enough, without going past chapter 1.
Thoughts, on this and this subject in general?
(Chapter 1 is here, for anyone interested in reading/critiquing, by the way, which would be greatly appreciated.)
I've had some critiques on chapter 1, and in some of those the critiquers (if that's even a word) had problems with a shift in the character, as they hadn't picked up on some things being hints to the character's personality and motivations, and thought of them only as what was happening. They were questioning like "why would he do this?" when the answer wasn't stated, being left instead as hints.
Basically, I haven't spelled everything about the character out, and the first the readers see of him is that he's depressed, drowning his sorrows with drinking (his wife died.) He looks down at himself, a drunken mess, and tries forcing himself out of it all. A "this isn't me" type thing. He hears about bandits kidnapping people, so he goes to hunt them. When he does he's a smartass and arrogant about it all.
Some critiquers didn't understand this shift in character, why he's gone from devastated to happily hunting and killing these people, and being having an arrogant personality now.
The reason for this is that he's a monster hunter/adventurer, who had spent a lot of life travelling and adventuring with his wife. After his initial realization of the "this isn't me" part, he tries to force himself back into his old life, trying to do what he enjoys. He just wants to forget it all and move on. He's arrogant because he's got a bit of an ego from never being defeated in battle (not large scale war type ones, more duels, if anything.) This also all adds to a twist with his character that happens later on.
I had thought that seeing him out and hunting like this, being the way he is at that point, would have made readers think something like "oh, how come he's like this, now?" so that they would read on to figure out what his character is all about. Instead, it seemed more like "that's not right." These critiquers simply thought I hadn't thought the character through well enough, it seemed.
So here's the question:
What would you do in a situation like this? Have his motivations and personality fully revealed over the course of a couple of chapters, or change it to have them spelled out more from the get go, or what?
Would you question the character's personality/motivations or the writing if you read this?
I don't want a reader picking up the book and putting the character's actions down as the writing not being thought through well enough, without going past chapter 1.
Thoughts, on this and this subject in general?
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