Alex97
Troubadour
Started writing my new draft the other day. The first chapter begins with a beach landing where the protagonist addresses his men before the battle. To be honest I'm thinking of cutting the speech all together since my character is respected more for his leadership and actions on the battlefield than long speeches. However I might be writing a battle speech for other characters and I was struck with a problem.
The more obviously tackled problem was the speech itself. It was cheesy and cliche due to the whole 'shield brothers' thing. The speech is more easily rectified. The troops' reaction is more difficult. Beating shields and shouting seems a bit over dramatic the way I worded it. On the other hand the main character is going to look like a real prick if his soldiers stare at him blankly.
Hoping someone more experienced could offer some advice.
The more obviously tackled problem was the speech itself. It was cheesy and cliche due to the whole 'shield brothers' thing. The speech is more easily rectified. The troops' reaction is more difficult. Beating shields and shouting seems a bit over dramatic the way I worded it. On the other hand the main character is going to look like a real prick if his soldiers stare at him blankly.
Hoping someone more experienced could offer some advice.