Incanus
Auror
(Knowledge of the original Mini-transitions thread not required.)
As I was working on editing the stuff with the transitions last night, I realized there is another facet to these transitions. Or, at least the ones that bother me and need work.
So in the text, I was not only covering little jumps in time between scenes, but was also zooming out from my MC’s POV to write about the group as a whole, using the terms “they/them”, “all/everyone”, and “group”. It is for this reason I have a few short transitions that last only a paragraph or so (something Skip had asked about).
To elaborate a little, the narration will move from a ‘scene’ as experienced through the MC’s POV, then into a bit about the ‘group’ and what they’re doing, and then into the next ‘scene’.
That said, I’ve included MC POV stuff within the parts pertaining to the group, so that the POV is consistent.
So then, is this kind of writing about the ‘group’ bothersome to some readers? Are there other ways or techniques to write about a group of people, of which the MC is a member? At the very least, are there any pitfalls or no-no’s when handling this kind of material?
As I was working on editing the stuff with the transitions last night, I realized there is another facet to these transitions. Or, at least the ones that bother me and need work.
So in the text, I was not only covering little jumps in time between scenes, but was also zooming out from my MC’s POV to write about the group as a whole, using the terms “they/them”, “all/everyone”, and “group”. It is for this reason I have a few short transitions that last only a paragraph or so (something Skip had asked about).
To elaborate a little, the narration will move from a ‘scene’ as experienced through the MC’s POV, then into a bit about the ‘group’ and what they’re doing, and then into the next ‘scene’.
That said, I’ve included MC POV stuff within the parts pertaining to the group, so that the POV is consistent.
So then, is this kind of writing about the ‘group’ bothersome to some readers? Are there other ways or techniques to write about a group of people, of which the MC is a member? At the very least, are there any pitfalls or no-no’s when handling this kind of material?