(This paranthetic statement represents the sound of me standing up and clapping.)
Terrific. I loved it.
Nice setting too. Waking Ned Divine, one of my favorite movies, was shot mostly at the Isle of Man. I also have some recordings (somewhere) of some a cappella traditional songs native to the area. Marneas an Tiger is a good tune, if you're so inclined.
There's so much I could praise about the story. I'll refrain somewhat because I don't want to ruin the experience for other members, but I have to say this reminds me of the best of Neil Gaiman's short stuff, not to mention some other great writers.
Congratulations! I hope I see or hear more of your work soon.
Finally got around to listening to this. Almost a year later....
A very good story. Kept me continually wanting to hear what came next. Had a certain Rod Serling quality to it. I also think the narrator's voice added a nice effect.