Wormtongue
Minstrel
I did a search and found the last discussion of this was two years ago. I decided not to open that crypt but start a fresh discussion.
In my feedback I have been told I'm not showing, I'm telling. So I went searching for some examples of how to show don't tell. I came across this example by Dawn Copeman
Two weighty paragraphs and absolutely nothing happens. I find that level of description frustrating. It is exactly the sort of thing I skip when I'm reading.
Given the ubiquity of the advice show don't tell, do I assume I'm in the minority?
In my feedback I have been told I'm not showing, I'm telling. So I went searching for some examples of how to show don't tell. I came across this example by Dawn Copeman
Tell: The ground floor, rented room was tiny, damp and obviously uncared for.
Show: "As he entered the room from the hallway the first thing he noticed was the fusty smell: a combination of mold, damp and stale cigarette smoke. There were snail trails across the worn, brown, cord carpet that covered what little floor space there was. Opposite the doorway, pushed up against the wall, was a single bed, covered with a duvet but no duvet cover and a flat, tobacco-stained pillow.
Squeezed into the corner of the room at the foot of the bed was a chest of drawers. On top of the drawers was a single electric hotplate. Opposite this was a sink piled high with dirty pots with a toothbrush just visible, peeking out through the handle of a mug. Facing the bed was a small table with a fold up-chair. On top of the table was an overflowing ashtray and yesterday's newspaper. Behind the door stood a mouldy wicker waste bin full of ash and cigarette ends."
Two weighty paragraphs and absolutely nothing happens. I find that level of description frustrating. It is exactly the sort of thing I skip when I'm reading.
Given the ubiquity of the advice show don't tell, do I assume I'm in the minority?