Thank you my fellow Mythic Scribers!

[Endymion]

Thanks to your helpful comments I have remarked a couple terrible mistakes (or bad ideas) I had done, and I have started correcting them. I started rewriting the "first part" and I believe that I have found how to make it far superior than what it was before. So yeah.
Thank you everyone!

 

[Aidan of the tavern]

You're welcome if I had anything to do with it.