Feo Takahari
Auror
I'll begin with what my prereader just told me:
In one form or another, I have been getting this complaint for years. The solution is obvious--"make your stories longer!" But I still haven't figured out what to add! I think of all the things I need to convey, and I write scenes that organically demonstrate those things, and then I put them together with (what I thought were) appropriate transitions, and it still winds up being shorter than all the other stories I've read that deal with similar ideas. The suggestion of "repetition" and "establishing time" seems to be a vital clue, but it's not a clear path forward. What on Earth should I do?
I've noticed that I'll often get very confused in works where you have a lot of worldbuilding or fantasy/sci-fi elements, and I wasn't sure exactly why that was until now. I knew it wasn't that your prose was too obtuse or anything . . . your writing will introduce many (often complex) concepts very quickly, and doesn't allow enough repetition, emphasis or establishing time for these new ideas to sink in. That is, your stories are often too short . . . Eternal, for instance, introduced some very big themes with romance, religion, redemption, the afterlife and regrets; having a rich and interesting setting using tons of fantasy elements; and had several plot threads/character POVs happening concurrently. That sounds like some prime novel material right there if you ask me. However, MS Word tells me that the entire story is around 16.8k words, not even long enough to be a novella . . . I kinda got the feeling that there was a full novel in there, but the story owl swallowed it, digested all the meat, then coughed up the novel's plot-bones in a dense novelette pellet.
In one form or another, I have been getting this complaint for years. The solution is obvious--"make your stories longer!" But I still haven't figured out what to add! I think of all the things I need to convey, and I write scenes that organically demonstrate those things, and then I put them together with (what I thought were) appropriate transitions, and it still winds up being shorter than all the other stories I've read that deal with similar ideas. The suggestion of "repetition" and "establishing time" seems to be a vital clue, but it's not a clear path forward. What on Earth should I do?