Holoman
Troubadour
Hi
I had some feedback on my writing recently that I used character's names too often and it got a bit repetitive. I think this mainly affects a scene in which there are 3 people interacting in quick succession so I need to make it clear who is talking/doing something.
The reader said I should refer to them under other names so it's not so repetitive, like 'the young man'. But my thoughts on this is that it reads really badly and just confuses the reader as they start to think there is another person there that hasn't been introduced.
For example in this part I use the name 'Darius' four times in hardly any words, and the reader said it got a bit grating.
Does this kind of thing annoy readers or is it just this person? The only way around it I think is to rewrite it so that I don't need to use his name so much.
I had some feedback on my writing recently that I used character's names too often and it got a bit repetitive. I think this mainly affects a scene in which there are 3 people interacting in quick succession so I need to make it clear who is talking/doing something.
The reader said I should refer to them under other names so it's not so repetitive, like 'the young man'. But my thoughts on this is that it reads really badly and just confuses the reader as they start to think there is another person there that hasn't been introduced.
For example in this part I use the name 'Darius' four times in hardly any words, and the reader said it got a bit grating.
‘You going to walk, or do I have to keep carrying you?’ Morden asked, turning to Darius.
‘I’ll walk,’ said Darius. He had no wish to be manhandled any further.
‘If we run into anyone, I’ll keep them busy while you two carry on ahead,’ whispered Belth. ‘We can’t afford for Darius to get caught.’
Darius wondered..etc
Does this kind of thing annoy readers or is it just this person? The only way around it I think is to rewrite it so that I don't need to use his name so much.