Recent content by Krieger

I'll admit, the plot's a mess. But aside from some of the things which are purely a matter of taste (religion bashing, etc.), what are some of the actual story telling issues that you noticed, and how would you change them?

Write what you want, tropes be damned. Worrying about how each element of a plot fits into some neat little box hasn't done anything for me except distracting me from writing. On a completely unrelated note, your MC's name makes my brain hurt. As a reader who doesn't speak Gaelic, there's no...

Detail has it's place, but not at the risk of interrupting the rhythm of the story. The way I see it, if the narrative is flowing at a good pace, details will slip by the POV character unnoticed; they're too tied up with their struggle to notice anything that isn't actually important to what's...

There's a great blog post that covers this here: Rights of Writers: Can I Mention Brand Name Products in My Fiction? Great info, since nothing pulls me out of a story faster than the typically horrible replacements for these things. I would caution against using specific references that aren't...

Exactly how do the plots relate to each other? Does your protag find herself mistaken for a spy and drawn in to this shadowy conflict, or is the rebellion merely a backdrop or a foil for her own life? Either of these scenarios would make for a very different tone to your story. I know which...

Madeleine L'Engle used this in A Wind in the Door. But thankfully as there is nothing new under the sun, there's no reason you can't make it your own.

I kind of like Kinetomancer (pronounced like Magneto of Marvel fame) for your movers, but honestly it sounds better out loud than it appears in print... I've always been partial to that kind of magic myself. If you think about it, most magic that has physical results can be the result of...