Recent content by tbgg

@Ronald T: I've decided my search needs be (tentatively) chapter 3, so what I'm planning is to post chapters 1-3 once I finish those rewrites. But in the meantime, I just discovered the writing app Scrivener and I have a few RL things to finish, so it's likely to be a few days yet before I get...

Thanks to everyone who took the time to respond. After correcting a logic gap, removing some text where I was telling not showing, giving my heroine more evidence of suppressed emotion, and rewriting the chapter ending a couple of times, I finally got something I didn't totally hate - I told...

I'm working on revising it - including trying to "make it more personal." However, I also found a gap in the logic surrounding where the body was found, so I'm trying to fix that as well, and I've had to do some research, which is why it's still not up. I'll post it here once I think I've...

Nice idea, except Flyt doesn't just pick up random scraps of parchment. Someone has to slide them in the pocket of his message harness. Plus, most people in this world don't know what geskril are - if they saw one flying around, they might be inclined to shoot it. And since she has to keep the...

What do they mean, "Make it more personal?" I'm not sure if you'll be able to see this, but try here: Continue Writing your Book Now | Now Novel Edit: Looks like you can't, not without signing in. I need to make some other edits - for one, I have too much backstory in my first...

I am working on my first novel, so I'm new to all the tricks of the trade. Please go easy on me if this is a dumb question. I just posted the first chapter of my WIP in progress on another site to get some feedback. Among the other feedback that I got was to make the chapter ending "more...

Here are the 3 characters that pertain to my question. MC = Kerenelle Kerenelle was raised by Luminara ("Lumi" for short) and thinks she's her mom, but really Lumi is her aunt and Kerennya (Lumi's older sister) is Kerenelle's birth mom. Lumi has been trying to reveal this fact to...

Hey, I'm in Albuquerque myself, even live pretty near the Eubank gate of KAFB. Hi, neighbor! Sent from my iPad using Tapatalk

I don't know how well-developed your shape-shifting lore is, but the insanity could affect the shape-shifter's ability to maintain whatever his current form is. Either the form could not fully materialize, a creature with parts from different animals or magical creatures (or even different...

Go back to the example used by FifthView. 'He' generally refers to the person you mentioned most immediately, unless context indicates otherwise. If you start a new paragraph each time the actor changes, it can help keep it clear who you're talking about. So, if you use tags because names...

On it - give me about 5 mins or so - thanks!

I'm not sure of the setting for your story, but what about trying to generate some creative insults in keeping with the setting and, if applicable, who's being yelled at? "Frazzlicking son of a succubus!" - (note here, 'frazzlicking' is a word I made up.) This could work as a general curse...

I'm a fan of the online game Dragon's Realm, myself. There've been a few bullies around as of late who have made playing a bit less fun, but I keep thinking that if I get to my second novel, I should incorporate them (with identities and appearances changed) in the action somewhere. Nothin'...

I suppose she doesn't, but a) the MC is of an age where romance tends to be important so talking about it is appropriate to the character b) later in the book, I'm having my MC make a female friend who IS more interested in romance and asks the MC whether she's interested in anyone. The...

I'm new to the forums, but I generally have to start with a character that interests me. Then when I have a pretty high level sense of what their journey is going to be about and some sense of their starting place and a few of the places they're going to need to go, I start working on the...