Harbinger
Troubadour
When I try to edit my work I often run into sentences like this:
Minnows darted to and fro in the shallows, scattering as the girl tried to grab one.
Should it be:
Minnows darted to and fro in the shallows and scattered as the girl tried to grab one.
...instead? They both seem active and read right to me. Is there difference?
Minnows darted to and fro in the shallows, scattering as the girl tried to grab one.
Should it be:
Minnows darted to and fro in the shallows and scattered as the girl tried to grab one.
...instead? They both seem active and read right to me. Is there difference?