Recent content by Aosto

Welcome aboard. I would imagine Davenport, Iowa is much like Des Moines, Iowa for a fantasy writer. Absolutely dull and boring! Then again, I'm not very social so I don't know if there is even a social scene for us fantasy folk.

Maybe try breaking this up a bit. Add a tag, or a beat. I don’t know who is talking at this point. Same as above. This long, drawn out sentence lessens the pace. Consider revising. Scarred how? Can you show me, or describe it? I feel the emotion in her voice. I would maybe break this up...

I think I would like to see a beat here. “Actually, I should.” He gently kissed her head. “I have to ride to Claudio Molin today and come back and talk to your father.” Here I think we’ve established that he is getting dressed. And there are two beats here as well. It throws the flow a bit...

No worries. I'll scan through yours. I gave it a quick read and nothing major stood out. But I'll give it a quick go.

I'll take the bate. Finn stood puzzled at the door when a soft hand settled on his shoulder. “People are leaving,” Brigit said “no one knows what to do.” Finn faced her, her brown eyes were puffy and red. Her long brown hair that normally fell over her shoulders was tied back in a...

My biggest struggle with dialog in the past has been adding unecesary beats. I would explain to the reader just about everything that was going on. I found it wasn't necessary to tell the reader this information. It's best to leave some to the imagination. So it turned into this. Another...

I haven't completed a novel yet, but here is my take. Writing a novel is a lot like building a house or doing construction in general. You, being the architect, draw up the plans down to the very last measurement. You flesh out materials used, gather, and build. Now at the end of the build you...

Here's a quick shot at it. I flipped through the channels. It being your typical Tuesday, and 2 am, all I could find were dusty reruns and infomercials. At least I had my popcorn. That little bit of comfort I picked up when she left. That's about when the insomnia took over too. "Get out!"...

That's a good question. I can't say I've read much where I was 'surprised' and it not be a plot twist of sorts. I agree with BW. Set them into a certain mood and then interrupt that mood with a sharp sentence or maybe an untagged piece of dialogue from the culprit(assuming a person is doing the...

I, too, am interested in hearing this. That seems to be the biggest downfall when it comes to self-publishing, the dreaded promotion. A friend of mine has self published a few Novels to Amazon and is reporting decent numbers. She does, however, run several free giveaway promotions. I know she...

Welcome aboard SmokeScribe98. You will find a great amount of talent and resources here, I can assure you that. Everyone here comes from many walks of life, and not all of use are published professional writers. We do all share the same ambition though, to write a great story for the people to...

Welcome aboard CAL9000. (trust that I will go with CAL for short). I'm sure you will fit right in here. Maybe you and Foah can collaborate on some epic maps. I am the opposite, I dread world-building and prefer to just get to the story. It's a bit of my downfall because I'm forced to stop and...

Would you be willing to share your blog link with us? I would be very interested in reading it, I to have a love/hate relationship with video games.

Thank you, everyone. I'm sure the chapters will gain some bulk in the second draft. I'm just getting the story on paper for now. Adding in what is required and will put in the fluff and extra later.

This is my first draft. I agree that I prefer short chapters. In the rate event that I get to read, I like to squeeze in a few chapters. But if they are 10k words each, is hard to find a good stopping point.