Recent content by Demesnedenoir

I have multiple origin stories from various religions, and then there is the truth. So far, I only graze them in the stories as they don't really come up in the flow.

I studied English Lit and read way too much poetry, and still, this is my favorite poem ever: I have a buddy my buddy is a toad he is kind of muddy and flat on the road. But he is my buddy, my buddy to stay, until he dries up and blows away. —Garfield the Cat So! I might not be the best...

Welcome aboard, I(a)nto. At least it didn't autocorrect to Mylanta or some such.

Welcome aboard!

Yes, creator mode. When I decide to do something I find fun, say creating a Jedi outfit, I think of what I can create myself. I lack the tools for crafting the lightsaber, but I am in the middle of making my belt. I'm unhappy with the standard "canon" lightsaber belt clips/holders, so I am going...

It works if it fits the system, and that's great. In my world, prayer may function in this way if your connection to the god in question is strong enough and they think your cause is useful enough, but more likely, prayer's power will come from the unconscious reaction of the god, but all of...

If words are necessary—going against the Depeche Mode lyrics—I would, on the one hand, as a reader, want examples, but I think I'd get annoyed if they were splattered all over the pages. But then, I find Potter and his wussy words and wands annoying and the books did just fine, heh heh. This is...

Hopefully, something I say sparks something useful. Blurbs are a pain in the ass.

Okay, here's another quick thought... and this is annoying because I like the line in general, but it is a "breath-holder" by which I mean it kind of pauses any visual story in the head. Introductory clauses always do. "While holding the city together against threats old and emergent by the...

The Blurb is a wicked game that may be the writer's version of Kaboyashi Maru. You just never know what's going to click.

I'm not digging the repetition of "preternatural" here. "very private" comes off a tad weak. "her city" makes me wonder. Not a big deal, but feels melodramatic or some such since the city is named previously. The quick repetition of "sidhe" could also be avoided. In an ideal world, I'd like...

It's difficult to say, but in novels, the montage is often a quick training scene with a sentence or two about other training. And the montage isn't directly the thing. A good cinematic scene that translates well to books is Luke and Obi-Wan on the Millennium Falcon with Han spouting off about...

The thing here is "change" amongst the many subplots of ASoIaF. Most chapters of ASoIaF don't move the overarching plot much, but they do move subplots that are subsequently linked to the overarching plot. Also, some of this isn't obvious, but if you look at it as a "game of thrones" and who...

This is tricky, but I'm going take a blind swing here... 6k words is probably bloated even if you are moving something forward. Why? I'm going by memory, but take a look at Silence of the Lambs by Thomas Harris. Granted, this is a different genre, but read a while and see how much happens in...

I'd be dreaming the story like I sometimes do now. Nope! No way in hell I'd be able to do that. Out. Cold.