Really? Without seeing how the sentence fits into the rest of the piece?
I see people giving this sort of advice, and it can be useful at times, but blindly stripping all the color out of a story doesn't make it better.
Are these sentences punctuated correctly?
Knees bent, shoulders back, and a glittering sword held high; the man known as ‘The Ghost Killer’ landed before him.
It swung, and slashed, and jabbed dramatically; illustrating it's master's mortal decree.
Thanks.