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  1. Divided

    Chapter 2

    Chapter 2 Brogan Brogan walked into the forge early the next morning, met by the peals of a hammer already beating against an anvil. “Don’t you ever sleep, girl?” he shouted over the din. After she’d stopped hammering, she muttered, “I’ll sleep when I’m...
  2. Divided

    Chapter 1

    Chapter 1 Taryn On a cool autumn night in her nineteenth year, Taryn found herself in a black and seething mood. She walked through the door of Cirrain’s only tavern, where the smells of wood smoke, ale, and road-weary travelers greeted her. She made eye contact with the barman, who nodded...
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    Divided

    The beginnings of a novel I'm working on, hoping to garner some insight and critiques. A young woman from an obscure village is plunged into a daring journey, complete with sword fights, dragons,and a kidnapped princess.
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    Probably sitting alone in the dark.

    Probably sitting alone in the dark.
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    Horses and travel times

    I would also consider the fact that riding on pavement is very hard on horses at any pace above a walk. They can end up with a number of issues which would lead to lameness, because the concussion of the hard ground sends vibrations up their legs.
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    Horses and travel times

    No, I've never broken any ribs but I'd imagine it would be quite unpleasant - a slow jog might be bearable in small doses though.
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    Horses and travel times

    From working with horses most of my life I can tell you that trotting is how we get and keep our horses in shape and a fit horse could trot for 2-3 hours no problem, but it does wear on the person riding them, unless its a slow smooth trot, in which case it would only be a little faster than a...
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    Fight Scenes

    Wow, thanks for all the input. It has given me a lot to think about. I agree that I need to find an editor - I have sent it to a few people but none of them really edited it, just read it and told me they liked where it was going. I think I have a lot to learn and a lot of work to do on this...
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    Fight Scenes

    So, using the first scene as an example, would this be a bit better? Taryn took in a deep breath through her nose and blew it out between tight lips, her stomach churning with apprehension. She took up a wide stance and raised her sword defensively. Her opponent swung his sword in a wide...
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    Fight Scenes

    Oops, didn't mean to post this on the introductions page. Still getting used to this, Sorry!
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    Fight Scenes

    Alright guys, so I'm working on a story with multiple fight scenes and I am hoping to get some feedback on them. After reading tips on writing a good fight scene, which said to be vague and leave the fight up to the readers imagination, I am worried my scenes are too detailed. I prefer them that...
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