BWFoster78
Myth Weaver
I received a comment on one of the sections I wrote. The sentence in question:
Leaves brushed his hair, and he lowered his head.
The comment:
Wouldn't it be better if you reversed that sentence? "He lowered his head as leaves brushed his hair." In my mind when you use "and" its as if both things happen at the same time. The rewrite shows a response to a cause.
In my opinion, "and" does not imply that the actions happen at once but rather sequentially. As a matter of style, I tend not to use "as" much.
What are your thoughts on "and" versus "as?"
Thanks in advance for your comments.
Leaves brushed his hair, and he lowered his head.
The comment:
Wouldn't it be better if you reversed that sentence? "He lowered his head as leaves brushed his hair." In my mind when you use "and" its as if both things happen at the same time. The rewrite shows a response to a cause.
In my opinion, "and" does not imply that the actions happen at once but rather sequentially. As a matter of style, I tend not to use "as" much.
What are your thoughts on "and" versus "as?"
Thanks in advance for your comments.