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The absences

GothAngel

Dreamer
The absence
The absence is big in life you
Try and try
But you make it worse.
But slowly it heals.
Then I realized I had to be a change.
Not just for me but for my future
Daughter, to shower her with love
Of a mother, the love I wanted.
-GothAngle
(Original poem written by GothAngel)​
 

pmmg

Myth Weaver
I do think you capture the vibe. My brain wants more natural rhythm, but...I feel the sentiment.

Should probably be moved to showcase though. :)
 

pmmg

Myth Weaver
The site design is critique requests is for stories looking for feedback, story showcase is just for stories meant to be read. Promotion is for something different.
 

xena

Sage
The absence
The absence is big in life you
Try and try
But you make it worse.
But slowly it heals.
Then I realized I had to be a change.
Not just for me but for my future
Daughter, to shower her with love
Of a mother, the love I wanted.
-GothAngle
(Original poem written by GothAngel)
What a touching reflection on healing and breaking cycles
 
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