Ahoy folks, please consider the following passage:
From the above, what's your impression of Emma's relation to her parents, respectively?
Take a moment to think about it before you go on.
My intention is that by having Kerstin address Emma as daughter I'm implying that the relation may be a little bit strained or that there's some tension between them. Her father on the other hand addresses Emma by name and I'm hoping this will show they're on warmer/better terms with each other.
What are your thoughts on this?
So it's not very long, but I'm hoping to achieve a few different things with it and I'd just want to run a few things by you. The reader will already be familiar with the PoV character, Emma, but this is the first time we meet her parents.Over in the big leather armchairs in the corner sat her parents — Herman, and Kerstin.
“Daughter,” said Kerstin.
“Emma,” said her father.
From the above, what's your impression of Emma's relation to her parents, respectively?
Take a moment to think about it before you go on.
My intention is that by having Kerstin address Emma as daughter I'm implying that the relation may be a little bit strained or that there's some tension between them. Her father on the other hand addresses Emma by name and I'm hoping this will show they're on warmer/better terms with each other.
What are your thoughts on this?