Incanus
Auror
So, a writing friend and member of this site recently commented on a few of my novel chapters. I received lots of great comments and helpful advice and appreciate the work.
There was one item pointed out–a quirk of dialogue that I gave to one character–as something to be fixed/addressed.
The character is a scholarly mage type, and I’ve made him an awkward speaker, someone who stops mid-sentence and changes direction, and someone who pauses with a fair amount of “uh” sprinkled into his dialogue.
So my question–is including “uh” in dialogue for this one character not a good idea? If so, is there another, more acceptable way of conveying this? Ideally, I would want this to take place within the quotation marks, so I’m not constantly interrupting the dialogue with tags and beats.
I’m not necessarily married to my original idea for this, so I could change it. But how important, or how detrimental is this?
There was one item pointed out–a quirk of dialogue that I gave to one character–as something to be fixed/addressed.
The character is a scholarly mage type, and I’ve made him an awkward speaker, someone who stops mid-sentence and changes direction, and someone who pauses with a fair amount of “uh” sprinkled into his dialogue.
So my question–is including “uh” in dialogue for this one character not a good idea? If so, is there another, more acceptable way of conveying this? Ideally, I would want this to take place within the quotation marks, so I’m not constantly interrupting the dialogue with tags and beats.
I’m not necessarily married to my original idea for this, so I could change it. But how important, or how detrimental is this?