Recent content by MAF4612

Firstly, thank you your highness for taking the time to reply I really appreciate the advice and bless you for the support. I can't believe I wrote this much :) You make great points and the options you've laid out are all valid, I think even if it kills I am going to go back with some serious...

Thank you Karlin for the reply, I have had a writing mentor and a friend look at initial chapters I've gotten great feedback but I guess they don't realise its standing at 300k so they're comments relate to the writing, but my writing mentor did make me aware of my pacing issue which is why I...

JBCrowson, thank you so much for this, you've hit the nail on the head, I have I suppose a number of arcs with many non-human races and you want to give them justice, I think I'm also giving more attention than I should be to elements that will be relevant to the other books and perhaps need to...

Hi Diana thank you for replying :D I've had the initial chapters looked at and I reduced them by 10,000 words, and I was made aware of my pacing issue with those initial chapters, but perhaps have not gone into a deep dive cutting of them. I'm realising the more I edit that the world building...

Hi Mad Swede, Thank you for the reply I really appreciate it. I have been asking around and have received a lot of helpful advice, I definitely need to consider in more depth the overall story arc, what is vital for the story. I think the problem I have is wanting to show all the elements of...

So I'm in potentially the final draft pre-querying of a YA fantasy I've been writing for what feels like my whole life at this point. it is Book 1 of 4, the major problem is book 1 stands currently at 300,000 words, which unless you're Brandon Sanderson will never see the light of day. Now...

So I'm in potentially the final draft pre-querying of a YA fantasy I've been writing for what feels like my whole life at this point. it is Book 1 of 4, the major problem is book 1 stands currently at 300,000 words, which unless you're Brandon Sanderson will never see the light of day. Now...

I'm writing a contemporary portal fantasy, that begins in semi-modern day London, I haven't indicated the exact year, but it is contemporary London. Now the MC is going from real world to fantasy world, my question is mentioning she has to leave her mobile/cellular phone at home because they...

Makes complete sense when someone else explains it to you. You navigate your way through life based on your experiences so it only makes sense to mention those picked up from before irrespective of where they were

That's a very good point, I guess I was worried about shattering the fantasy, but the characters will need to occasionally compare places and relate experiences from their previous life. I suppose it comes down to subtle references rather than it taking over the whole narrative. Thank you for...

I'm writing my first fantasy YA which is a portal-based fantasy that takes the protagonist from our real world into the fantasy world. I'm wondering if anyone can help me decide on how much of the real world should I mention when the protagonist is in the fantasy world. More specifically will...