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    What to do when grammar gets you down.

    Thank you all for your helpful replies. I have taken a great deal of advice on board. I'm going back and getting my grammar down, before I continue with my most recent edit. Thanks again, Thomas
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    What to do when grammar gets you down.

    Now that is expensive.
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    What to do when grammar gets you down.

    I've been getting feedback on my work. Story is solid, but the grammar and use of adjectives needs work. My trouble with commas is getting me down. I woke up this morning eager to write, but now all I'm doing is chewing through my work, trying to sort out grammatical issues. I want to make...
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    Hunting the Dread

    Eleanor squinted through the pelting rain. Her thick auburn locks had turned black and frozen in the torrential weather, as the longship crested another storm darkened wave. The fine vessel groaned as it crashed down the back of the wave, sending up a great splash of sea water. The young witch...
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    Dwarf sea hunting song

    To the seas, to the seas We go hunt, we go hunt. Kill the beasts, kill the beasts See their blood, see their blood. Lighting flash and thunder cry! Call the beasts unto the sky! To the seas, to the seas, Go the dead, go the dead. Bring the wrath, bring the wrath, Of the Dread, of...
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    Narrative Exclamation

    What about exclamation marks in thought? Eg: This will get forty silver at market! Thought John, as he slipped the goblet into his bag. It helps show the feeling of excitement the character (here John) has.
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    Do you title your chapters?

    Breakfast in the afternoon???? Yes it depends on what I'm right. I do like having titles, but if I cannot get one to fit in with what I am writing, then I will more likely then not just number them all the way through.
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    The Magpie.

    The Magpie The Magpie flew upon a dark blue field. Ser Isaak Kern raised his heraldry, for it to be beaten down by his foes mace. He punched his spear forward in weak retaliation, the steel head shooting sparks as it hit The Badger's left greeve. Ser Jone Fleour brought the rim of his shield...
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    Need help with a short section

    Yep seems clear to me.
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    The anti-stereotype thread

    Cook, hmm I'll have to look into his/her work.
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    The anti-stereotype thread

    I would say The Game of Thrones, in fact A Song of Ice and Fire is a very non stereotype example of Fantasy, and one of the reasons it has done so well. There are no perfect people, Th beautiful knights are just as terrible as the surly villains sometimes. Yes there are dragons, but they are...
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    What's faster by way of travel

    Sea, but you haven't provided much information on sea currents, road conditions, and weather etc, so i cannot provide a very accurate answer. Apperating is of course the fastest
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    Showing vs. Telling

    Its a very well put point here, and I would say a combination of the two, showing and telling is needed. From my experience the two used together make for a better piece. I would say the main problem about this 'advice' is that it makes new writers nervous, and over analysis there work where it...
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    Mental sickness and breakdown

    Another useful form to show and highlight madness, is to have said character work and interact with the sane. This way you can show the character acting from a sane POV, and see how your mad character views these people who are sane. would he consider them so in regards to his own mental health?
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