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[Hasanbey45658]

I'm creating my own fantasy story, like something out of the Middle Ages. I've taken inspiration from Game of Thrones, Lord of the Rings, Narnia, and all other fantasy things. It will be a golden continent ruled by the House of Castor. It will be somewhat ideological, narrative, and fantastical. Of course, I don't know how the process will unfold, but I would appreciate your support. This is my first time writing. Currently, there are 3 regions and 1 nomadic tribe:

1- United Archipelago

2- Kalkangrad

3- Talleyrains (they are the vizier of the continent)

4- House of Castor (there are 16 kings in total, their reign has lasted 341 years)

6- Five Islands

7- Karhuns (they are nomadic, mostly raiders)

8- Forest.

So, that's the story. It's actually finished at 70 pages, but I didn't like it. It resembled Game of Thrones, and the dialogues were too short. So, that's the situation. I would appreciate your help.

The plot revolves around the Castor dynasty, specifically King Galen and his guard, Arvic Talleyrain. They are close friends, but the vizier, Varris Talleyrain, is a power-hungry individual. Elvis is a warrior, while Galen is antisocial, avoiding battles. After their father, King Vires, dies, a power struggle erupts among the Castors. Elvis receives little support because the highest-ranking Castor wins the throne. However, Elvis defies this rule and instigates a rebellion (the United Archipelago supports him).

Then, during a gathering for the crown, the Lord of Kalkangrad is killed in a street fight. The people of Kalkangrad, believing the Talleyrains are responsible (and already intending to rebel), revolt. Taking advantage of this situation, the Forest region also raises its banner of rebellion, while the Five Isles remain neutral. The Golden Continent is divided. The Talleyrains possess the most fertile lands and the best military unit (they have riflemen). In short, that's the plot for now; I haven't gotten to the war part yet. The plot development alone has taken 70 pages. I'm writing this much to avoid a lot of text. I will summarize If there's anything you don't understand, please write it in the comments.

We see both of our main characters, Arvic and Galen, in their POVs, and occasionally we see other people's POVs, but mostly infrequently. This is where I'm undecided; should we just have one person's POV? We have too many side characters, by the way.

 

[Finchbearer]

You could do omniscient à la Lord of the Rings, or you could do multiple POV’s like A Song of Ice and Fire. Or have a blend. Being aware that whatever you choose will dramatically affect the narrative structure and feel of the storytelling.

 

[Hasanbey45658]

Yüzüklerin Efendisi'ndeki gibi her şeyi bilen bir anlatıcı kullanabilirsiniz, ya da Buz ve Ateşin Şarkısı'ndaki gibi birden fazla bakış açısı kullanabilirsiniz. Veya ikisinin bir karışımını tercih edebilirsiniz. Seçiminizin, anlatı yapısını ve hikaye anlatımının havasını önemli ölçüde etkileyeceğinin farkında olun.

Peki, birazdan bahsedeceğim etkinlik, dediğim gibi, iyi bir etkinlik mi? So, is the event I wrote about good, as I said, I mean, is the story good as I'm writing it now?

 

[Naruzeldamaster]

Peki, birazdan bahsedeceğim etkinlik, dediğim gibi, iyi bir etkinlik mi? So, is the event I wrote about good, as I said, I mean, is the story good as I'm writing it now?

Can't judge if it's good or not until you actually write it, further the only one who should be judging (while writing) is you unless it's done.
I say give both versions/methods of writing it a go for a chapter and see which one you like more. Maybe do a third version that's a hybrid even.
I do like your basic idea but until we see it in action we can't judge the whole story.

 

[Hasanbey45658]

Yazmadan iyi olup olmadığını değerlendiremeyiz, ayrıca (yazarken) değerlendirecek tek kişi siz olmalısınız, tabii ki iş bittikten sonra değil.
Bence her iki yazım yöntemini de birer bölüm için deneyin ve hangisini daha çok beğendiğinize bakın. Belki de hibrit bir üçüncü versiyon bile yapabilirsiniz.
Temel fikrinizi beğendim ama uygulamada görmeden tüm hikayeyi değerlendiremeyiz.

You're right, I'm planning to finish the story this summer, but it might be next year too; I'm still undecided. Let's see what happens. I'm going to expand this story quite a bit; I've been thinking about it for three years now, and I'm going to broaden it considerably.

 

[Naruzeldamaster]

You're right, I'm planning to finish the story this summer, but it might be next year too; I'm still undecided. Let's see what happens. I'm going to expand this story quite a bit; I've been thinking about it for three years now, and I'm going to broaden it considerably.

you're planning a lot more than I do lol much respect, I'm a huge pantser (Writer who doesn't really 'plan') and I've been trying to plan a little more with my newer works, but it's incredibly hard to kill an old habit haha

 

[Hasanbey45658]

Sen benden çok daha fazla plan yapıyorsun, haha. Çok saygı duyuyorum, ben tam bir plansız yazar (gerçekten 'plan yapmayan' yazar) ve yeni çalışmalarımda biraz daha plan yapmaya çalışıyorum ama eski bir alışkanlığı bırakmak inanılmaz zor haha.

Doğru, eski alışkanlıkları kırmak zor. Ben de eski alışkanlıklarımı kırmakta zorlanıyorum Ama bence olabildiğince sistematik çalışırsanız yazınız daha iyi olacaktır.

 

[Hasanbey45658]

I'll be writing to you all, but I won't be very active for quite a while. Until then, see you later...