Garren Jacobsen
Auror
About a year or so ago I started a novel that I had planned to be told in three parts. It was about a young thief from a village of thieves who became a mage that can manipulate gravity and motion. I plan on it being a tale about his fall from being a good guy to becoming a ruthless king, fighting demonic influences and trying to stave off the end of humanity in this world and the next.
The three parts of the story are titled The Youth, The Spy, and The Rebel. The Youth is about the young man's story of getting his village's version of justice on someone that betrayed them. It ends with the killing of the traitor by the boy's hand. That attack is particularly brutal. The Spy is about him spying on an enemy country during a war. It ends with him rushing back to the Infinite Tower, his home, and releasing a demon. The demon then takes him under his proverbial wing. The Rebel is about the young man taking over the nation and installing himself as king. He also banishes the demon to "The Realm Between Worlds." It's a kind of empty limbo that tortures anyone trapped within it. But in doing so he has to rip a piece of the demon's "soul" and take it for himself, which gives him demonic personality traits. At the end he ascends the throne and controls an army of monsters and men.
One major problem I am seeing is that I feel I am rushing a few threads that will make the ending payoff. E.g. corrupt government that makes Garren want to revolt, corrupting Garren, proper showing of his nihilistic thoughts, and others. Also, less important, I want to develop more of the world as it relates to the story, especially the magic system. Finally, some of the important points mentioned above (killing of traitor, and so on) feel rushed to me.
So, for those who may have faced this problem before what was the thought process in resolving it? Any suggestions?
The three parts of the story are titled The Youth, The Spy, and The Rebel. The Youth is about the young man's story of getting his village's version of justice on someone that betrayed them. It ends with the killing of the traitor by the boy's hand. That attack is particularly brutal. The Spy is about him spying on an enemy country during a war. It ends with him rushing back to the Infinite Tower, his home, and releasing a demon. The demon then takes him under his proverbial wing. The Rebel is about the young man taking over the nation and installing himself as king. He also banishes the demon to "The Realm Between Worlds." It's a kind of empty limbo that tortures anyone trapped within it. But in doing so he has to rip a piece of the demon's "soul" and take it for himself, which gives him demonic personality traits. At the end he ascends the throne and controls an army of monsters and men.
One major problem I am seeing is that I feel I am rushing a few threads that will make the ending payoff. E.g. corrupt government that makes Garren want to revolt, corrupting Garren, proper showing of his nihilistic thoughts, and others. Also, less important, I want to develop more of the world as it relates to the story, especially the magic system. Finally, some of the important points mentioned above (killing of traitor, and so on) feel rushed to me.
So, for those who may have faced this problem before what was the thought process in resolving it? Any suggestions?