Rinzei
Troubadour
Hello all! I have a few stories percolating in the old noggin, but one of my first stories keeps coming back to me. Now that it's been a few years and I'm no longer 15, it's begging for new life with a revamp.
The story falls under modern fantasy. Basically, there are other angels that have fallen to Earth after Lucifer for centuries. As angels, they still retain some of their "divine" power, which could be passed on to mortal descendants.
My problem is that the original story went the whole elemental-shebang: water, fire, earth, air, mind, body, and time... And each had sub-categories even! Looking at it now, it just feels cliche and redundant to have all those elemental categories going on when maybe a handful would be better, and less like a school-time cartoon.
Once I've cut them down for the revamp however, I've found myself with only Mind, Body and Time and their sub-categories (which in turn have also been trimmed to a few each). My worry is that this makes it TOO streamline, compared to how broad the selection was before.
On one hand, I don't want there to be death-by-selection or come off as an 80's cartoon (
By your powers combined, I am CAPT-- ). But I also don't want there to be a lack of variety between the characters' abilities. I also want the magical elements to make sense with the Angels - looking back, it doesn't make a lot of sense for an angel to control water...
Can anyone give me some insights on this? I'd greatly appreciate it.
The story falls under modern fantasy. Basically, there are other angels that have fallen to Earth after Lucifer for centuries. As angels, they still retain some of their "divine" power, which could be passed on to mortal descendants.
My problem is that the original story went the whole elemental-shebang: water, fire, earth, air, mind, body, and time... And each had sub-categories even! Looking at it now, it just feels cliche and redundant to have all those elemental categories going on when maybe a handful would be better, and less like a school-time cartoon.
Once I've cut them down for the revamp however, I've found myself with only Mind, Body and Time and their sub-categories (which in turn have also been trimmed to a few each). My worry is that this makes it TOO streamline, compared to how broad the selection was before.
On one hand, I don't want there to be death-by-selection or come off as an 80's cartoon (
By your powers combined, I am CAPT-- ). But I also don't want there to be a lack of variety between the characters' abilities. I also want the magical elements to make sense with the Angels - looking back, it doesn't make a lot of sense for an angel to control water...
Can anyone give me some insights on this? I'd greatly appreciate it.