First I like to agree that this was pretty ruthless, especially for having only read 13% of the book.
But as others have said, try to look past the snarkiness and see what you can glean.
I read the synopsis, and I do think that first line does set off alarm bells and can put a reader in the wrong mind set, having them focus on stuff that isn't necessarily the story. It's like making a bad first impression. Once that happens, rightly or wrongly, it's hard to recover from.
IMHO, if you remove the two instances of the word black in the synopsis, it silences those bells.
I hope this doesn't discourage you. If anyone wants to grow as a writer, they have to step out of their comfort zone. And when that happens, there's always potential for mistakes. There's a couple of sayings I hear in playing sports all the time. Playing to win. Playing not to lose. The latter usually gets you nowhere.
But as others have said, try to look past the snarkiness and see what you can glean.
I read the synopsis, and I do think that first line does set off alarm bells and can put a reader in the wrong mind set, having them focus on stuff that isn't necessarily the story. It's like making a bad first impression. Once that happens, rightly or wrongly, it's hard to recover from.
IMHO, if you remove the two instances of the word black in the synopsis, it silences those bells.
I hope this doesn't discourage you. If anyone wants to grow as a writer, they have to step out of their comfort zone. And when that happens, there's always potential for mistakes. There's a couple of sayings I hear in playing sports all the time. Playing to win. Playing not to lose. The latter usually gets you nowhere.
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