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We have home schooled for almost 2 decades. It allows you to go at your pace, and included any interest you may have. I am you can do on-line as we do. Our day starts at nine or eleven, and ends at two. We do this six days a week. There is an hour off for lunch, and generally we watch...

Yes I would. But i am a vessel of odd.

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Come on guys... no body. Not one person has any thoughts?

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Friendly dragon, doing what he loves, drinking tea and reading. My kind of dragon.

I think trying to write what's popular is silly. Unless you are very quick and clean, it is highly doubtful that you would succeed anyway. And where do these trends come from? From folks writing what they want to.

I have a snake that is an antagonist's familiar. I need a name. Tell me what you like: Dither, Akimbo, Withershins, Bugaboo and Puckeroo. oooooooooo The novel is meant to have a humorous appeal. With that in mind, what do you think would be more interesting to read about? In the...

Yah, I misspelled. Dyslexia working its Mojo on me again.

I don't understand why folks don't like to use names in opening paragraphs. I think names are a good thing. Over all this paragraph uses description well and dose what an opening paragraph should: give us a setting, show tone, introduce the character or characters, and as a question...

It could be... What are your thoughts.

Here are my thoughts: In the first line of the first paragraph, I would replace the pronoun with a proper noun. Any name goes much further is showing us the world and something about the character than a pronoun. I think you could tighten this up: He had the look of a lost kitten, but the...

I think you should read this: Punctuating Dialogue -- How to Punctuate Dialogue Correctly To my taste, you have little more than a pair of talking heads. I think it needs more.

Thank you for the reply. No, I don't mean that kind. I regard that as standard good writing. By this do you mean foreshadowing? Is there something more?

I would like for my novel to be something more than an enjoyable read, although that must come first. Some novels are more, so have a greater depth to them. I would love to try for this. How do you think other novels have done this? How do you think another writer could also do so?