Thanks for that Brian,
I've never been that good at writing blurbs. I thought it was all out the who, the where and the why. I guess as you say, it needs more emotion.
Kind regards
Trev
Greeting Scribers
It's been a long time, but I've finally released the full version of my novel The Fall of Light. A novel which started right here in the Mythic Scribes portfolios. Here's the blurb!
"On the planet Clanesta, humans have learnt to live in peace with a unique race of...
The Fall of Light
Book 1 of The Crystal Companions Saga
Chapter 6 – Retreat to the Throne Room (shortened Version)
Linta stood at the window, paralysed with fear as the monstrous creatures ran riot beyond her Kingdoms walls. When the first blinding blast of lightning hit the outer wall...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Chapter 5 – A Dark Night
Down on the huge impregnable grey walls, two guards stood atop the battlements looking out over the cold barren grounds beyond the castle boundary. It had started to snow and the wind was picking up, the two...
Greetings fellow scribers,
In addition to writing fantasy, I also write Sci-fi novels too! My new book War Never Ends is now available on Amazon, in both paperback and Kindle formats.
Check it out here...
War Never Ends: The Human Story Arc: Book One (Dominion) (Volume 1): Trev Briggs...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Chapter 4 – Flash Backs and Dreams [3916]
By the following midday, Alesson was desperate to get out of his father’s chambers, which he had come to know as his prison. He had been rudely awoken before breakfast time by Trengar, who...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Chapter 3 - The Kings Discretion (and Secrets) [3607]
The blackness of unconsciousness was starting to lift and the darkness gave way to lighter shades of grey and white swirls. The swirling patterns behind Alesson’s eyes reminded...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Chapter 2 - Battle Practice [3960]
The twins left the classroom and went into the great Scorvain Archives, with row upon row of bookcases, holding a variety of books, scrolls and charts. It was also considered a sacred place, which...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Chapter One - History Lessons (3775)
Prince Alesson Scorch gazed out of the classroom window and surveyed the cold city of Scorvain, the city he was destined to rule one day. It was late wintertime and snowy clouds were rolling...
The Crystal Companions Saga - Book 1
The Fall of Light
Prologue [2412]
Life from lifelessness
(The Legend of Karna and Kax, Part 1)
When Clanesta was born at the beginning of time, she was nothing more than a ball of rock, spinning chaotically around, on an erratic orbit of a deep...
Thanks everyone for taking the time to respond and for giving me some great pointers.
I've realised this morning (thanks largely to the above posts) that experience probably isn't the most important thing that is neccesary in making this scene work, because after all I've never had a personal...
Thanks for the reply JCFarnham,
My main concerns really are:-
1, The sort of language that I can use in a book aimed at 13+ year olds and
2, I'm not too good at romance in real life (even though I'm married with children), which doesn't give me much experience to add to the feel of the...
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So...
I've got the fantasy world looking good, the plot sorted and the action scenes down to a standard that I'm happy with, but now on the eve of an epic battle I need a touching mildly romantic scene that would be acceptable for young adults.
It's the first book in my series of five and my...