Wormtongue
Minstrel
I asked a friend (avid reader, not a writer) to read the first page of my wip and give me feedback.
I was surprised that his major comment was that it was difficult to keep track of all the names.
I introduce eight characters on the first page, ranging from the main antagonist to single-mentions. But I haven't named anybody who isn't specifically mentioned in dialog.
I don't give much physical description of either place or people.
So now I'm considering how I might reduce the number of people introduced on page one, or make it easier to keep track of who's who.
I'm considering stretching out the first interraction with the main antagonist to allow the reader to gain a little insight into who he is before throwing more names at them. Or adding a bit of physical description for the important ones. Or starting with a less crowded event.
I was surprised that his major comment was that it was difficult to keep track of all the names.
I introduce eight characters on the first page, ranging from the main antagonist to single-mentions. But I haven't named anybody who isn't specifically mentioned in dialog.
I don't give much physical description of either place or people.
So now I'm considering how I might reduce the number of people introduced on page one, or make it easier to keep track of who's who.
I'm considering stretching out the first interraction with the main antagonist to allow the reader to gain a little insight into who he is before throwing more names at them. Or adding a bit of physical description for the important ones. Or starting with a less crowded event.
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