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I agree with glutton. The MC feels a little useless in the climax the way it is right now. Especially considering she did stab the villain's eye out before, and you've said in other posts that she tries to escape him a few times. She doesn't seem like the passive type, and yet in the climax she's broken out of jail by someone else, her father persuades the king to spare her, and then Loegaire kills the villain.
She seems like she's a strong character, so personally, I would be disappointed in how little it seems like she's doing here. I don't think she necessarily has to throw herself between the villain and the king, but maybe she could be the one to convince the king not to kill her so it seems like she's saved herself and then the villain comes in and is not okay with that so the other guy kills him. Probably not the greatest solution, but I do think it would be better if she were more active.
She seems like she's a strong character, so personally, I would be disappointed in how little it seems like she's doing here. I don't think she necessarily has to throw herself between the villain and the king, but maybe she could be the one to convince the king not to kill her so it seems like she's saved herself and then the villain comes in and is not okay with that so the other guy kills him. Probably not the greatest solution, but I do think it would be better if she were more active.