iWant iStrive
Dreamer
Hi there
I'm currently writing my first novel and have a pretty good idea of how I want the story to go. For now though I am finding articulating what I want hard, I think part of the problem is that I am a very visual person and the ideas in my head sometimes don't come out well on paper. I have one particular problem right at the beginning of my story that involves the main character, who so far has no name. Here is a particular problem paragraph.
Then he heard something approach rapidly behind him. As he turned his ears were filled with a resonating growl. He saw a grey wolf bounding between the trees behind him, eyes fixated on the advancing soldier. He dared not move but froze praying that the wolf did not turn its gaze onto him. The soldier gave a shout, raising a sword and began charging at him. The wolf lunged forwards as his right arm desperately clawed at his left gauntlet to remove it. Just as the catch came undone he heard a roar and looked over to see the wolf tearing through the soldiers sword wielding arm. With both arms free he dropped onto his side and slid the chestplate off, the wet earth crawling up his back sending chills through his body until finally he was free.
Here we have a wolf appear, and a soldier advancing. In the paragraph all the 'he' and 'his' refer to the main character, with the others being referred to by name. But reading it back I think it could be confusing just who 'he' and 'his' refers to, but am having trouble rewording it to avoid confusion.
Can anyone help? Are there any rules to when you can use 'he' for characters in a scene like it always refers to the same person per paragraph or something?
Thanks
I'm currently writing my first novel and have a pretty good idea of how I want the story to go. For now though I am finding articulating what I want hard, I think part of the problem is that I am a very visual person and the ideas in my head sometimes don't come out well on paper. I have one particular problem right at the beginning of my story that involves the main character, who so far has no name. Here is a particular problem paragraph.
Then he heard something approach rapidly behind him. As he turned his ears were filled with a resonating growl. He saw a grey wolf bounding between the trees behind him, eyes fixated on the advancing soldier. He dared not move but froze praying that the wolf did not turn its gaze onto him. The soldier gave a shout, raising a sword and began charging at him. The wolf lunged forwards as his right arm desperately clawed at his left gauntlet to remove it. Just as the catch came undone he heard a roar and looked over to see the wolf tearing through the soldiers sword wielding arm. With both arms free he dropped onto his side and slid the chestplate off, the wet earth crawling up his back sending chills through his body until finally he was free.
Here we have a wolf appear, and a soldier advancing. In the paragraph all the 'he' and 'his' refer to the main character, with the others being referred to by name. But reading it back I think it could be confusing just who 'he' and 'his' refers to, but am having trouble rewording it to avoid confusion.
Can anyone help? Are there any rules to when you can use 'he' for characters in a scene like it always refers to the same person per paragraph or something?
Thanks