Amanita
Maester
Hello everyone,
I’d like to get your help on a more specific question about my story. Somehow, I’ve hit a wall with this and I hope someone can give me a useful impulse.
As mentioned in my last thread it suffers from a few severe problems and I’m working to sort them out at the moment.
Given that magical training will be an important part of the story, I’m wondering what’s the best way to do this. In my first draft, I have a system combining mentor-student-relationship with group training sessions at the weekends and a few weeks together. I’ve chosen this approach because the differences in age of knowledge between the novices make a school system rather difficult. (Besides the fact that magic schools aren’t the most original concept out there.
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Given the fact that I have elemental magic based on chemical elements a training system where they don’t learn to interact with others doesn’t make much sense either though, therefore the combined version.
Rethinking the problems that my first draft had, an amount of redundancy was the result of this however. Besides that, there weren’t many things happening during the group training besides a bullying plotline which I’ve already decided to cut. I also had some scenes in ordinary school and her adept’s city which I don’t really know if should keep either. Too many characters and places that don’t really matter to the plot enough. In the last thread I did get the idea to introduce a more severe thread there however.
The novice Lenima and her adept Corin are both main characters, that was my reason to choose him as her mentor, I wanted to avoid unnecessary characters again. There’s a problem as well however. They have different elements, chlorine and oxygen and he doesn’t really understand the troubles she’s facing and therefore can’t help her much. This way, the plot doesn’t move on either of course. One reason why I’ve kept the common training sessions so far. The teacher in charge of her there is quite nasty and doesn’t really encourage her either though. (People from the Mythic Cantina thread will know.
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Lenima is supposed to move from not wanting anything to do with it all and wanting to home to acceptance and curiosity. At the moment, she’s feeling sorry for herself for way too long and I know that this will annoy potential readers rather than grab their interest. She's seventeen by the way.
Now I’m asking myself what I have to change about the training to improve this. Does someone see the flaw in the stuff I’ve described above? I seem to be blind to it for some reason. Do you think a pure magic school setting with more interaction between various novices would help?
I’d like to get your help on a more specific question about my story. Somehow, I’ve hit a wall with this and I hope someone can give me a useful impulse.
As mentioned in my last thread it suffers from a few severe problems and I’m working to sort them out at the moment.
Given that magical training will be an important part of the story, I’m wondering what’s the best way to do this. In my first draft, I have a system combining mentor-student-relationship with group training sessions at the weekends and a few weeks together. I’ve chosen this approach because the differences in age of knowledge between the novices make a school system rather difficult. (Besides the fact that magic schools aren’t the most original concept out there.
Given the fact that I have elemental magic based on chemical elements a training system where they don’t learn to interact with others doesn’t make much sense either though, therefore the combined version.
Rethinking the problems that my first draft had, an amount of redundancy was the result of this however. Besides that, there weren’t many things happening during the group training besides a bullying plotline which I’ve already decided to cut. I also had some scenes in ordinary school and her adept’s city which I don’t really know if should keep either. Too many characters and places that don’t really matter to the plot enough. In the last thread I did get the idea to introduce a more severe thread there however.
The novice Lenima and her adept Corin are both main characters, that was my reason to choose him as her mentor, I wanted to avoid unnecessary characters again. There’s a problem as well however. They have different elements, chlorine and oxygen and he doesn’t really understand the troubles she’s facing and therefore can’t help her much. This way, the plot doesn’t move on either of course. One reason why I’ve kept the common training sessions so far. The teacher in charge of her there is quite nasty and doesn’t really encourage her either though. (People from the Mythic Cantina thread will know.
Lenima is supposed to move from not wanting anything to do with it all and wanting to home to acceptance and curiosity. At the moment, she’s feeling sorry for herself for way too long and I know that this will annoy potential readers rather than grab their interest. She's seventeen by the way.
Now I’m asking myself what I have to change about the training to improve this. Does someone see the flaw in the stuff I’ve described above? I seem to be blind to it for some reason. Do you think a pure magic school setting with more interaction between various novices would help?