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No, the is not what I'm saying. What I'm talking about is not nitpicking for the telly parts. I could care less about the telly parts. I'm talking about big picture goals.
Let's pretend you didn't put the TV into your scene. Instead you had Adrien sitting around moping about Ladybug. He has a long winded monologue about how he is desperate for information on her. He is doing a whole lot of telling the reader about how much he likes her and how much he wants to know stuff about her.
As a reader I will sit back and think... okay... So I'm expected to just "believe" that you want information about her, but you are sitting around on you butt doing nothing. So you are telling me one thing, but showing me another.
Then you rewrite the scene. You think.... how can I show this? How can I show him desperate for information? Eureka! He will be watching her on TV! Great idea! Great way of showing his need for information!
So it is not a nitpicky thing. It is about really thinking about the best possible way to show the goal. In the examples I gave above they were "telling" the reader "this is really important!" but they hadn't thrown the TV in. They had missed the showing part.
It may seem remedial. I still have moments where I realize I didn’t show as well as I could have. I relied too much on the reader to just “believe me” when I told them something. So maybe I’m still remedial. But that is how I find the terms useful. Large scale, scene planning level.
And, would I find it useful in teaching or coaching or helping others? I wouldn't. I find "don't tell" confusing and "show something" to be unhelpful. I try to look for more specific advice.
But I can and should say what worked for me and what didn't, *and why*.
I wouldn’t sell that side of yourself short. Not too long ago you gave me advice on my opening scenes, suggesting that I reorder them some for a better effect.Yeah, I wasn't clear enough on that. I have some pretty in depth convos with my partners that can go on for pages and pages of emails or very lengthy skype conversations. I definitely say what worked and what didn't, and "why" I "felt" it didn't. but I tend to avoid detailed instructions on "how" to fix it. I find most writers will come up with their own, amazing ideas, that actually tie into the greater theme of the work, on their own.
I agree with this 100%.If your stories fall flat because readers cannot connect to your world or characters, then chance are, you are telling the reader what to think, rather than showing them the world.
I have found it helpful for critique for a few reasons, but this may be specific to my method of critiqing. My philosophy on crits has evolved significantly over the past few years.
I believe that stories should be a curation of carefully chosen scenes and symbols that build upon each other to deliver on a (hopefully) impactful and satisfying ending. Because of this, I don't believe in giving specific advice because...............
I agree with this 100%.
I encounter a lot of new books that, to me, read like they are trying to be movies and I very much dislike that. I would like my movies to be movies and my books to be books. Each should use their medium to their advantage without trying to be like the other.
I agree with this, as personal taste. I don't think it is wrong to write like that. But I tend to appreciate books that have a stronger narrative voice than the third person close narrative we see so often now. I love Kurt Vonnegut because it feels like he is telling the story, not showing it through a character. I loved that about Hemingway too.
And this is where I think the terminology get's murky. I like that I get to hear Vonnegut, or Hemingway "tell" the story... but when they do that, even when they are "telling" me... they know exactly what scenes, imagery, metaphors, symbols, and characters to "show" for maximum impact. This is why, for me, I use it to describe how scenes and goals are "shown", not the word choices or the POV the writer uses to make that happen.
This is where, I feel, "show, don't tell" has gotten confused. If we look at Vonnegut or Hemingway, or even Tolkein and say "It is telling. It is wrong." And we look at GRRM and say "this is showing, it is right", then I don't think we are really using the terms for all they are meant to be. We are narrowing them into only representing voice, or style. Both styles show, and both styles tell. You have to look at the big picture way the story is presented and get away from limiting the terms to just referring to voice or POV.
Oh god, it's all so convoluted, lol.