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Incanus
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Great. This thread is turning out even better than I had hoped.
Connective tissue--there's an appropriate phrase. Too little of that would be bothersome to me as well, though I imagine different readers have different thresholds about this--and other things as well.
In a few instances, I was able to flow from one section to the next. In other spots, I used the three asterisk break. But in altogether too many places there's that soggy tell-y stuff. Those are the problem.
I can leave a few of them, but what I need are more of those 'content' types of transitions Nimue brought up, as well as things like Caged Maiden suggested.
Creative thinking and hard work ought to get me closer to something I can live with.
Connective tissue--there's an appropriate phrase. Too little of that would be bothersome to me as well, though I imagine different readers have different thresholds about this--and other things as well.
In a few instances, I was able to flow from one section to the next. In other spots, I used the three asterisk break. But in altogether too many places there's that soggy tell-y stuff. Those are the problem.
I can leave a few of them, but what I need are more of those 'content' types of transitions Nimue brought up, as well as things like Caged Maiden suggested.
Creative thinking and hard work ought to get me closer to something I can live with.