Gryphos
Auror
I've been coming up with the (or at least one of the) mythology for my fantasy world, including the genesis story. It's slightly different in that it doesn't actually include 'gods' exactly, but it does have divine beings(ish).
'In the beginning' all there was were two mountains far apart amongst an endless ocean. The sun was static in the sky and therefore it was always day and always light. One of the mountains was tall, reaching into the clouds, and it was the home of the Drakes (or the 'Drafasche' as they're referred to). The greatest of the Drakes was called Kol-Sathos, the primal being as old as the sun, who lived on the very peak of the tall mountain. The other mountain was shorter and wider, as well as black and hollow. The inside of the black mountain was the only place of darkness and this darkness spawned a newer race, the Griffins (Grithalc). The griffins lived and multiplied in the darkness of the black mountain, growing in power.
The original griffin, 'Gryphos', was the first and therefore the strongest. Eventually Gryphos grew enough in power to be able to break apart the black mountain. Gryphos split open the mountain, allowing the griffins to leave for the first time. The first ever encounter between drakes and griffins was one of bloodshed. The griffin Feldorii killed the drake Steksid and crippled another, casting it into the ocean.
This led to war between the griffins and drakes, a great battle. Gryphos fought Kol-Sathos and eventually managed to kill him, blasting his body into nine pieces with his song. The drakes surrendered immediately after the death of Kol-Sathos. Then the griffins put Kol-Sathos' corpse, along with the drakes, inside the black mountain and sealed it again. However, some drakes hid in the ocean to avoid imprisonment, and lay in wait.
So Gryphos was basically king of the universe, but it was boring, static. Griffins like action, change, events. They also like darkness, so Gryphos diminished the sun to a smaller form and put the removed material in the sky (the stars). Then Gryphos created the moon and put one griffin, 'Norcunus', in charge of pulling the sun over the horizon and the moon over, creating a cycle of night and day.
But the world was still boring, so Gryphos sung a song that brought up new land from the ocean, simple rock formations. The rain that once fell into the ocean now flowed over the land in rivers. It's this time that the drakes came out of the ocean and found places to hide in the rocky mountains.
Then Gryphos had to take a long rest. During this rest, a griffin called Blaritos fell from the top of the tall mountain and died from the collision. Blaritos' blood created grass, plants. The other griffins thought this was pretty neat and decided that plants should be everywhere, so they carried the seeds to every piece of land in the Domain. So plant life developed and thrived into countless forms.
When Gryphos woke up he thought it was pretty neat, too, and it inspired him to create complex life. So he and the griffins created complex life in the form of animals. This life was very fulfilling to Gryphos, but he wanted life even more complex, sentient life that could comprehend its creators. So he made the Lunra (basically like humans but taller and with grey skin). The Lunra worshipped the griffins, but their civilisation was primitive.
So a griffin called Ikbus came to the Lunra and gave them knowledge, things like language and writing, how to mine for materials etc. So the Lunra civilisation grew and thrived on the central island, never venturing onto the other islands.
Then the drakes were discovered and the second drake war was fought, this time mainly by the Lunra, though the griffins did fight alongside them, wearing metal armour fashioned by the Lunra. Gryphos' power was drained by creating life, so he abstained from the war. In his place the griffin Feldorii led the griffins and Lunra to victory, driving the drakes once more into hiding.
So there was peace again and the Lunra devoted themselves even more to the griffins. Soon the griffins started revelling in pleasures of the flesh. They let the Lunra decorate the with necklaces and had their ears and wings pierced with gems. The griffins would attend feasts and become drunk from wine, as well as high from the fumes of special leaves.
One griffin, 'Brakku', loved it so much he wanted his own species to devote themselves to him and him alone. So Brakku went to a small mountain and created life from the rock. But Brakku was not as powerful as Gryphos, so the life he created was lesser than the Lunra, small and squat. He created the Dwarrow, who worshipped Brakku.
He tried to keep the Dwarrow hidden but they were eventually discovered and brought to Gryphos' attention. Gryphos let the Dwarrow live so long as they worshipped all griffins. Brakku reluctantly agreed and the Dwarrow soon had their own small civilisation, having been shown knowledge by Ikbus.
But Gryphos couldn't help but be inspired by this, so he yet again decided to create more life. Weaker than before, he couldn't create Lunra, but he could create something almost as good as Lunra, humans. He put humans on the other islands, but told Ikbus to now give them knowledge for fear of them starting wars with the Lunra.
But humans eventually ended up developing technology by themselves anyway, having far greater ingenuity than the Lunra or the Dwarrow. Humans spread to every island in the Domain other than the central one, where the Lunra lived.
Then there was the third and final drake war. This time the drakes were led by a traitor griffin, 'Vistakrii', who killed Feldorii in battle due to his armour being superior. This time the drake onslaught was unstoppable. It wasn't long before they completely wiped out the Lunra and advanced on the tall mountain, ignoring the Dwarrow. Gryphos sung a song one final song. The song killed Vistakrii and most of the drakes, causing the remaining ones to hide once more. But this final burst of energy was one too many. Gryphos collapsed dead on the peak of the mountain and what few griffins remained went on.
Millennia passed again and humans began to settle on the central island, developing as they did, creating their own history. But the Lunra were forgotten from the world by everyone but the Dwarrow, who still remembered and worshipped the griffins just as they always did.
Sorry about the length, but I went quite in-depth with this. The worst part is I had to skip over some stuff to make it not overly ridiculous in length.
But basically, I just want to know if this is good in any way. Is it original? Is it interesting? Can it be improved? etc.
'In the beginning' all there was were two mountains far apart amongst an endless ocean. The sun was static in the sky and therefore it was always day and always light. One of the mountains was tall, reaching into the clouds, and it was the home of the Drakes (or the 'Drafasche' as they're referred to). The greatest of the Drakes was called Kol-Sathos, the primal being as old as the sun, who lived on the very peak of the tall mountain. The other mountain was shorter and wider, as well as black and hollow. The inside of the black mountain was the only place of darkness and this darkness spawned a newer race, the Griffins (Grithalc). The griffins lived and multiplied in the darkness of the black mountain, growing in power.
The original griffin, 'Gryphos', was the first and therefore the strongest. Eventually Gryphos grew enough in power to be able to break apart the black mountain. Gryphos split open the mountain, allowing the griffins to leave for the first time. The first ever encounter between drakes and griffins was one of bloodshed. The griffin Feldorii killed the drake Steksid and crippled another, casting it into the ocean.
This led to war between the griffins and drakes, a great battle. Gryphos fought Kol-Sathos and eventually managed to kill him, blasting his body into nine pieces with his song. The drakes surrendered immediately after the death of Kol-Sathos. Then the griffins put Kol-Sathos' corpse, along with the drakes, inside the black mountain and sealed it again. However, some drakes hid in the ocean to avoid imprisonment, and lay in wait.
So Gryphos was basically king of the universe, but it was boring, static. Griffins like action, change, events. They also like darkness, so Gryphos diminished the sun to a smaller form and put the removed material in the sky (the stars). Then Gryphos created the moon and put one griffin, 'Norcunus', in charge of pulling the sun over the horizon and the moon over, creating a cycle of night and day.
But the world was still boring, so Gryphos sung a song that brought up new land from the ocean, simple rock formations. The rain that once fell into the ocean now flowed over the land in rivers. It's this time that the drakes came out of the ocean and found places to hide in the rocky mountains.
Then Gryphos had to take a long rest. During this rest, a griffin called Blaritos fell from the top of the tall mountain and died from the collision. Blaritos' blood created grass, plants. The other griffins thought this was pretty neat and decided that plants should be everywhere, so they carried the seeds to every piece of land in the Domain. So plant life developed and thrived into countless forms.
When Gryphos woke up he thought it was pretty neat, too, and it inspired him to create complex life. So he and the griffins created complex life in the form of animals. This life was very fulfilling to Gryphos, but he wanted life even more complex, sentient life that could comprehend its creators. So he made the Lunra (basically like humans but taller and with grey skin). The Lunra worshipped the griffins, but their civilisation was primitive.
So a griffin called Ikbus came to the Lunra and gave them knowledge, things like language and writing, how to mine for materials etc. So the Lunra civilisation grew and thrived on the central island, never venturing onto the other islands.
Then the drakes were discovered and the second drake war was fought, this time mainly by the Lunra, though the griffins did fight alongside them, wearing metal armour fashioned by the Lunra. Gryphos' power was drained by creating life, so he abstained from the war. In his place the griffin Feldorii led the griffins and Lunra to victory, driving the drakes once more into hiding.
So there was peace again and the Lunra devoted themselves even more to the griffins. Soon the griffins started revelling in pleasures of the flesh. They let the Lunra decorate the with necklaces and had their ears and wings pierced with gems. The griffins would attend feasts and become drunk from wine, as well as high from the fumes of special leaves.
One griffin, 'Brakku', loved it so much he wanted his own species to devote themselves to him and him alone. So Brakku went to a small mountain and created life from the rock. But Brakku was not as powerful as Gryphos, so the life he created was lesser than the Lunra, small and squat. He created the Dwarrow, who worshipped Brakku.
He tried to keep the Dwarrow hidden but they were eventually discovered and brought to Gryphos' attention. Gryphos let the Dwarrow live so long as they worshipped all griffins. Brakku reluctantly agreed and the Dwarrow soon had their own small civilisation, having been shown knowledge by Ikbus.
But Gryphos couldn't help but be inspired by this, so he yet again decided to create more life. Weaker than before, he couldn't create Lunra, but he could create something almost as good as Lunra, humans. He put humans on the other islands, but told Ikbus to now give them knowledge for fear of them starting wars with the Lunra.
But humans eventually ended up developing technology by themselves anyway, having far greater ingenuity than the Lunra or the Dwarrow. Humans spread to every island in the Domain other than the central one, where the Lunra lived.
Then there was the third and final drake war. This time the drakes were led by a traitor griffin, 'Vistakrii', who killed Feldorii in battle due to his armour being superior. This time the drake onslaught was unstoppable. It wasn't long before they completely wiped out the Lunra and advanced on the tall mountain, ignoring the Dwarrow. Gryphos sung a song one final song. The song killed Vistakrii and most of the drakes, causing the remaining ones to hide once more. But this final burst of energy was one too many. Gryphos collapsed dead on the peak of the mountain and what few griffins remained went on.
Millennia passed again and humans began to settle on the central island, developing as they did, creating their own history. But the Lunra were forgotten from the world by everyone but the Dwarrow, who still remembered and worshipped the griffins just as they always did.
Sorry about the length, but I went quite in-depth with this. The worst part is I had to skip over some stuff to make it not overly ridiculous in length.
But basically, I just want to know if this is good in any way. Is it original? Is it interesting? Can it be improved? etc.