Ireth
Myth Weaver
After receiving some feedback on the opening of Winter's Queen, I'm a little concerned about the portrayal of my heroine, Ariel. She's a few weeks shy of 17, but some have remarked that she comes off as about 13. This is a bit of a problem, as I don't want her to seem naive or childish. Does anyone have any advice as to how I can keep her actions age-appropriate (and for those who have said she seems young, could you give examples of where she acts under her age so I can edit them)?
The opening scene is here for your perusal: http://mythicscribes.com/forums/showcase/4848-rethinking-my-opening-scene.html I advise you to read through all of the revisions, not just the first one.
The opening scene is here for your perusal: http://mythicscribes.com/forums/showcase/4848-rethinking-my-opening-scene.html I advise you to read through all of the revisions, not just the first one.