jacksimmons
Scribe
Hey guys,
I am writing a short story/novella that is fairly straightforward plot-wise. It's a space-opera/dark fantasy thing about a family (two parents and a daughter) living on a gloomy alien planet and they are haunted by a being called a Kindastadht because of something terrible they did in the past.
I want to keep this terrible thing a mystery until about 1/3 of the way through the story, with hints and slow reveals from the get-go. I just wonder if leaving this thing a mystery is going to frustrate the reader rather than compel them?
The only way I know to really get honest feedback is just to post the beginning here and see what you guys think, although general ideas/points etc. for those who don't have the time to read will be much appreciated also.
So with that in mind I have posted the first third of the story here: JustPaste.it - Share Text & Images the Easy Way
Thanks in advance. And thanks especially if you read the story so far.
I am writing a short story/novella that is fairly straightforward plot-wise. It's a space-opera/dark fantasy thing about a family (two parents and a daughter) living on a gloomy alien planet and they are haunted by a being called a Kindastadht because of something terrible they did in the past.
I want to keep this terrible thing a mystery until about 1/3 of the way through the story, with hints and slow reveals from the get-go. I just wonder if leaving this thing a mystery is going to frustrate the reader rather than compel them?
The only way I know to really get honest feedback is just to post the beginning here and see what you guys think, although general ideas/points etc. for those who don't have the time to read will be much appreciated also.
So with that in mind I have posted the first third of the story here: JustPaste.it - Share Text & Images the Easy Way
Thanks in advance. And thanks especially if you read the story so far.